sorry, can't say I like it. It's too fragmentary in places, and other lines are just weird.
The last 12 lines or so are ok though.
What I would do:
There she lay.
Broken and confused
But in love
Her blades as only saviors.
to made her feel free.
to reminded her of him.
The blood as their love.
The scars as memories.
The utensils his honesty.
The way he had cut her off.
16 years, 10 months & 15 days ago
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