he lies with a teardrop on his cheek dripping down to fall on sodden sheets, the hopelessness in his brain overcomes him as he lays alone and silently weeps, voices and the pain screaming the intensity of loss burning hurt ripping through him as the wind blows outside the window moving the world forward a world that he wants to see a world that he wants to share a world he knows he will no longer see and the pain grips intensifying with every breath. and then stills. as the hurt leaks weaker from his heart he turns his head to the window and stares at the moon, swallowed up in its greatness the extreme existence of earth his mind follows his life and wonders? pondering the complexity that is living acceptance overwhelms him as he lays down his tired head and gently closes his defeated eyes against a world that never real knew what it was that he said.
******** copyright of this poem has been registered to myself so please do not copy and paste onto random blogs - many thanks - johnny
You already got plenty of wordplays in this poem, but it doesn't always flow that well, and there are hardly any sound patterns (not talking about rhyme)
117 years, 1 month & 14 days ago 22nd May 2009 00:35
know its hard 4 u johnny & this is heartbreakin man, missin u, be bk sat
luv ya bro
117 years, 1 month & 29 days ago 6th May 2009 12:15
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Awsome Johnny.
117 years, 1 month & 30 days ago 5th May 2009 16:34
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